Wednesday, March 30, 2005

Immortal, Perhaps

I enjoyed the different interpretations of my previous poem, so I felt the urge to write another one in a similar vein, the only difference being that this has been done consciously, and hence rather poorly. So, let me know what you think this poem is trying to convey! :)

First, my Argus-eyed friend,
you must cleanse yourself
of the very earth that
nourished you.

Strip the
shabby brown coat
off your pale body.

Submit to the
purification bath
and emerge
soft and golden.

Lose yourself.
Disguise yourself
in the brilliance of
the red, the yellow, the green.
Dissolve in the
salt of your tears.

And then,
the world will marvel,
and ingest you
into immortality -
only you will know it not.

14 Comments:

Blogger buckwaasur said...

hmmm...some vegetable??

9:38 PM  
Blogger asuph said...

so this is poetry 101 hands on training eh?
lol@iw's gut feeling.
I've a gut feeling, his gut feeling is right.
Buck spoiled it for me. Now I just can't think of any different interpretation -- that's what they call getting stuck in a pattern I guess...
The moral of the story? I failed either ways.

asuph

10:33 PM  
Blogger Silent Melody said...

Hey Ano, I shudn't have read the comments. Now I can think only "Potatoes"..

Whatz it?

12:37 AM  
Blogger Rajavel said...

I am with IW : potatoe it is !

12:38 AM  
Blogger CogitoErgoConfusum said...

Although I'm tempted to agree with the others about the 'vegetable' angle,i don't quite see how it could be ingested into immortality...

So here's another take, along the lines of beach bum's alternate guess...the lifecycle of one whose soul has succeeded in breaking away from the body...and all that arty-farty stuff...but our man won't exactly be argus-eyed to begin with,so that doesn't quite fit too...

Which leads me to my final guess - its about the Sun, from dawn to dusk on a bright non-cloudy day...

Unless of course you want my hyperactive dirty-mind to do the commenting...:P

2:17 AM  
Blogger CogitoErgoConfusum said...

gee,thanks IW :)...yeah,a green Sun doesn't make much sense initially...but that stanza could be talking about the rays of the sun facilitating the losing, disguising and dissolving...bit of a stretch? oh well,what the hell...:))

4:59 AM  
Blogger Ubermensch said...

potato chips

10:35 AM  
Blogger Billy Jones said...

I just thought you'd want to know that one of your fans nominated you to become the first Blogging Poet Laureate.

Good luck.

4:49 PM  
Blogger thoughtraker said...

thanks so much everyone, for contributing to this - it was very interesting!

this was actually an ode to......JASSI! You'd know if you have been following the serial, which is an Ugly-Duckling-to-Cinderella story. The lines were meant to reflect how she overcomes her inherent nature and conquers the world...

if you're shaking your head in disbelief, well, blame it on being the Kalends :))
[an entirely unplanned coincidence]

so, congrats! most of you got it right! it was an ode to the potato, and the way it must morph itself and totally lose its individuality before it can become immortal, except that once it's broken down into its constituent particles and sub-particles, it no longer knows itself...

on another level, the journey to immortality could really be anybody's - people who are considered immortal now definitely aren't around to know that (or so I believe) :D

i do hope u had some fun with this, and let everyone discover this journey for himself/herself (if you know what i mean) ;)

9:19 PM  
Blogger thoughtraker said...

Blogging Poet Laureate??
Pfft! I know it's April 1st!!

otoh, if this is serious, my sincere thanks to the mystery fan who's nominated me - I appreciate it! And thanks, blogging poet, for notifying me about it.

9:29 PM  
Blogger NS said...

Ano,
Ur poem here has triggered some research! On the first reading, I could only think of death and the person becoming immortal... But after reading the comments, the poem seemed gr8 in the potato perspective...:)

Keep writing more..:) and LOL @ Jassi!!!

10:36 PM  
Blogger thoughtraker said...

blame it on buck nithya! he's the one who started off the vegetable trail!!

thanks IW - u've been stoutly defending the potato's position - i must commend u on that! :D

9:35 AM  
Blogger Billy Jones said...

April fools.... no it wasn't. One of your fans nominated you. Good luck.

4:37 AM  
Blogger thoughtraker said...

Thanks, blogging poet, for clarifying and for your wishes.

11:15 AM  

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